SCP Creation

wonderweiss

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06/03/2013, 01:47 AM #31
Btw, here is a termination order. These always sound like stories. http://scp-wiki.wikidot.com/termination-order
Jaeyjay

Jaeyjay

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06/03/2013, 02:01 AM #32
Oh hey, I remember this. I used to read a lot of it last year. Remi also did a livestream of the game a while back, not sure if the video was saved though.

wonderweiss

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06/03/2013, 02:55 AM #33
Musta been hilarious. Well, here's the final post regarding SCP 2000.

Extermination Log (Part 2)

The following is a conversation between Emily and SCP 2000. They are inside the subject's containment room. The entrance was sealed, but the voltage on the walkway to the island has been toned down to a voltage low enough to walk around safely in rubber boots, which Emily is wearing. The subject shall be referred to as Cell Zero for this log.

Emily: "...hi."
Cell Zero: "...that voice..."
Emily: "It's me... =====.
Cell Zero: "Why... does that name... wait, don't tell me-"
Emily: "Yes, it's me, your mother."
Cell Zero: "You have a lot of guts to show your face around here."
Emily: "I know. The agents that brought me here told me everything about you, including...your soul.
Cell Zero: "Yea. Pretty amazing, huh? I attempted to escape five times, and I succeeded the last time. I broke this place in half. Unfortunately I'm still here."
Emily: "I heard the recorded conversation between you and a female doctor."
Cell Zero: "Oh, you don't want to go there with me. I almost escaped that time. The doors are sealed and you have no drugs on you. But something tells me you wanted it that way. Would you care explaining that, ====="
Emily: "I didn't bring them because I didn't need them. I need to talk to you about-"
Cell Zero: "My anger issues? Yea, a lot of people tried. They failed."
Emily: "Why do you hate me?"
Cell Zero: "Why do you think? You let me get taken away without putting up a fight. What's worse... you seemed relieved. Was that all I was? A burden?"
Emily: "It isn't what you think. I felt relieved because they told me you were going to be free. They told me you were going to be taken care of."
Cell Zero: "Oh yea? Well guess what? I was still there for another bloody 2 years. Luckily, the power went out. I managed to find an escape route using my intelligence. The intelligence you gave me."
Emily: "I gave you intelligence and lethal combat knowledge so that you could protect yourself. So that you wouldn't end up like me. I to this day regret killing all those people, and for what? Just because [DATA EXPUNGED]?"
Cell Zero: "Well guess what? I became exactly like you. As a matter of fact, I became much better than you."
Emily: "I know."
Cell Zero: "And you know what else? I died for god's sake. Look at me. I'm still alive because I hated. I hated you.
Emily: "Please, it was all just a misunderstanding. I loved you, and I still do."
Cell Zero: "Yea right. Then where were you when they took me away, huh? Where were you when I escaped?! Where were you when I died?!"
Emily: "Please calm down!"
Cell Zero: "No way! I've been waiting all my life for this."
Cell Zero begins sounding more demonic and deformed.
Cell Zero: "Now you've come to me! I've wanted to kill you ever since I escaped!"
Emily: "No..."
Cell Zero's jacket begins ripping.
Speaker: "=====, get out of there now! The subject is about to break loose!"
Emily: "No! I will protect him!"
Cell Zero: "Protect me?! You made my life a living nightmare! Now you pay for it!!!"
Cell Zero's jacket breaks. A dark shadow rises from the now lifeless body.
Cell Zero: "DIE, YOU WITCH!!!"
Cell Zero stabs Emily in the kidney. Emily coughs up blood.
Emily: "... I... love you... no matter... what..."
Emily walks closer to Cell Zero, and proceeds to hug him.
Cell Zero: "What are you doing? You want a death wish?!"
Emily: "I want... you... to be happy..."
Cell Zero: "... you... I hate you!..."
Cell Zero begins to show tears.
Emily: "Then why did you stab me in the kidney? You know that the heart or the brain means instant death... I taught you this... remember?"
Cell Zero: "... I... why... WHY CAN'T I KILL YOU?!"
Emily: "Because... deep down inside... you still love me... and deep inside... you wished that I would love you as well."
Cell Zero's massive smoke begins dissipating. He is now the size of a regular teenager.
Cell Zero: "...mom...I... couldn't answer that question... I am the smartest man on earth... and yet you answered a question that I couldn't."
Emily: "I...am...your mother...aren't...I..."
Emily collapses.
Cell Zero: "Mom... mom!... MOM!!!
SCP 2000-2 completely disappears. SCP 2000-1 wakes up and regains consciousness. He breaks free from the iron bars and walks towards his mother, enduring the voltage. He is in heavy tears.
Cell Zero: "Someone... anyone! Call an ambulance! Call the medics! Call anyone! Just bring my mother back!!!"
The voltage from all over the room was turned off. The medical team rushes in to help Emily.

From then on, SCP 2000-2 was never heard from again, with or without the straight jacket. Emily made a full recovery. Cell Zero was moved to a less intensive containment room. He is now classified as Safe/Euclid. The reason that he is classified as Euclid is that if SCP 2000-1 were to regain a strong hatred, the chances of SCP 2000-2 reviving would be high. Only Class C or higher operatives and his mother are allowed to see him. His new containment cell is the same size as his old cell. However, the interior now represents a living room. If anyone were allowed in the room, they were to treat the subject nicely and show no signs of hostility. Any signs of hostility will be greatly punished and the offender is not allowed into that room again. Case closed.
Jaeyjay

Jaeyjay

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06/03/2013, 03:32 AM #34
I think 2000 is already taken.
http://scp-wiki.wikidot.com/scp-2000-j
Though it's a joke SCP.

wonderweiss

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06/03/2013, 03:36 AM #35
F***. Oh well. Mine will not be a joke.
Jaeyjay

Jaeyjay

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06/03/2013, 04:12 AM #36
I recommend posting your SCP in the forum for criticism before creating it on the site.

http://www.scp-wiki.net/how-to-write-an-scp
Also read through that and all the tabs if you haven't already. As it states, "Many first SCP articles fail miserably for one reason or another, primarily due to the writer's lack of experience. This is not an excuse. This is a challenge."

Your SCP is very well written and I like it, but I can't really say if it can be posted or not. The community is very picky on the guidelines to follow to create an SCP.
Example
Originally posted by wonderweiss

Containment Procedures: Must be contained in a 30x30x30 room.

30 what? Feet? Meters? Yards?
Kristia

Kristia

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06/03/2013, 04:16 AM #37
I wonder how creative people have been with the SCP

Have you ever crossed the line between sanity and madness? You would be amazed by what lies beyond the fog..

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wonderweiss

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06/03/2013, 04:22 AM #38
Originally posted by Jaeyjay
30 what? Feet? Meters? Yards?
Miles!!! No its feet. I guess I frgot that. And scp reviewing is the reason i put up this thread.

@Krista
Well then, lets find out.

Let the hunger games begin!!!
WriggleRid3r

WriggleRid3r

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06/03/2013, 04:24 AM #39
Here's a joke one.

SCP-2010.2: The Creepy Goddess


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wonderweiss

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06/03/2013, 04:26 AM #40
One, it would be scp 2010-2. Two, JESUS FUKIN CHRIST THAT IS A KETER!!!