@Amaterasu
Okay... Uh.. I'm sorry but I will have to deny this app. Several things wrong with it.
One the concept is okay, I like it. The problem with it is that it clashes with quite a bit of stuff myself and others in the RP had planned in the future. The Headmaster Mr. Daichi does not have children, and was an only child himself (no adopted siblings.) No reports of an adopted family member.
Not only that but the war happened roughly 50-60 years ago and the Headmaster was born near the end of said great magical war. So it would be almost impossible for your character to have been around during the war unless he was not human or had access to life extending magic (which is rare for humans). Also even then he potentially had the "power to turn the tables of the war" would make his magic seem... really... powerful.
"Even in sparring his power is a force to be reckoned with" does make his power seem to be quite dangerous even in sparring.
I know I should add a bit more lore to the opening post of this RP, but a lot more info is going to be revealed in the future of the RP.
You should fix the Pravus, and Daichi family and stuff about the war, and provide more info on his magic itself because I am iffy on the raw power that his magic possesses.
Okay... Uh.. I'm sorry but I will have to deny this app. Several things wrong with it.
One the concept is okay, I like it. The problem with it is that it clashes with quite a bit of stuff myself and others in the RP had planned in the future. The Headmaster Mr. Daichi does not have children, and was an only child himself (no adopted siblings.) No reports of an adopted family member.
Not only that but the war happened roughly 50-60 years ago and the Headmaster was born near the end of said great magical war. So it would be almost impossible for your character to have been around during the war unless he was not human or had access to life extending magic (which is rare for humans). Also even then he potentially had the "power to turn the tables of the war" would make his magic seem... really... powerful.
"Even in sparring his power is a force to be reckoned with" does make his power seem to be quite dangerous even in sparring.
I know I should add a bit more lore to the opening post of this RP, but a lot more info is going to be revealed in the future of the RP.
You should fix the Pravus, and Daichi family and stuff about the war, and provide more info on his magic itself because I am iffy on the raw power that his magic possesses.
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