[OOC Board] Eternal Galaxy: Shards of Starlight - Part I

Cucoo5

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09/29/2013, 05:14 AM #41
Ah ok

An I just realized something.
One of the main things of Eternal Galaxy is the concept that Aion has been going back into the past by one year each time he failed his mission for preventing the "Inevitable Conclusion"
Every, the same events happen. But I write the story on the 1,000th time and something different happens...
Before I just had one character become the difference. But here, we could have everyone be the difference.
In short, Everyone that joins in would become pivotal to Part II's ending sequence.

Koishi

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09/29/2013, 05:19 AM #42
So a Groundhog Day sort of deal?




Sometimes when you're driving down a road, a bug hits your windshield. It's ugly and unpleasant, but you just activate the wipers / cleaning fluid and it's gone in a few seconds. It's just part of driving down the road. You don't dwell on it, because that'd be silly. Bugs aren't worth the time.

You just discard their guts and keep on driving.
Kristia

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09/29/2013, 05:23 AM #43
Name: Mara

Gender: Female

Race: human turned into bioroid

Profession and/or Talents: As a former human, Mara is good with the peoplés ways of socialization, and as being a bioroid she is phisically better than the average human. In terms with her current body, the bioroid has a good talent of electronics and hacking, in short words she is good in the electronic warfares.


Inventory:
- Twin energy daggers coming from the upper part of her wrists http://th02.deviantart.net/fs71/PRE/f/2012/017/2/c/reach_covenant_energy_dagger_by_toraiinxamikaze-d35548h.png
- A handheld portal creator more for transportation usually, but can be also used in a battle http://th04.deviantart.net/fs71/PRE/f/2011/132/e/f/portal_gun_by_jevi_infinity-d3g5uod.png
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Appearance: (I know its GlaDOS, but an image is better than 1000 words)
In her usual attires she has a pale skin and white almost waist long hair, she has black eyes with golden irises, her clothing is composed of a black and orange jumpsuit that covers from her feet to all the way of her neck, on the arms lay arm braces were she can use as protection and to hack an electronic device. On the feet are a pair of white heels with bent black metal alloys on the back of them. http://th08.deviantart.net/fs70/PRE/i/2012/309/9/f/surfaced_by_red_elice-d5k1ugb.png

But in the case of bigger battles, the bioroid uses a white looking armor that protects her body http://fc00.deviantart.net/fs70/i/2012/284/2/c/reconstructing_more_science_by_red_elice-d5hhz9z.png
Personality: Mara is tries to act normal, but since her mechanical side looks obvious on her, humans tend to get away from her thus giving the white haired a loner personality in usual days, but when the time comes, she shows her true colors by going forward facing the advesity with no fear

Elemental preference: Light, since this element can power up objects, Mara can take advantage of it to charge her daggers and portal gun and also overcharge electronical devices

History: There is not much to say about Mara´s past, being adopted by robotic scientists gave her a rather lone young years and barely seeing her parents, but after an accident when the ship were she traveled to a human outpost had a malfunction in the docking bay exploding. The 24 years old woman had next to no chance to live unless she went through a bioroid surgery.

Now after a year of adapting to her new body, the white haired worked in hacking programs to protect the human databases and in human/mechanical weaponry. Her personal works were a pair of energy daggers that were synchronized with her mind and a handheld portal creation weapon prototype. Those two objects were only for her as she didn´t trusted the humans since they could use them for nefarious ideas

Bio: Tired of the human prejudiece against mechanical beings, Mara decided to leave her work and travel through the many planets to see new discoveries and people who could probably understand her

Have you ever crossed the line between sanity and madness? You would be amazed by what lies beyond the fog..

Spoiler
Cucoo5

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09/29/2013, 05:40 AM #44
@ kristia
Looks good, though I'll make one slight adaptation
Because of the vast cultures of Venturia, Bioroids, androids, and cyborgs are typically not that uncommon and are accepted. My original Bioroid concept was that they would be next to impossible to discern from normal people, but the various aspects like the eyes and such would make sense depending on the possible variations of the procedure, so I'll just adapt that to fit the new concept you got. The prejudice would probably be seen only in certain areas, if she wound up in like the space port of like Duon for example, she would find herself to be widely accepted. Maybe a few curious looks from the younger crowd and possibly more disapproval from the elders who would have certain views.

In short: We could say that she's been in the parts of the galaxy that sees such discrimination, but it'll be interesting once she reaches the mainstream where it doesn't exist as much but is a slight undercurrent...

End result it all looks good.
Where would ya want to start her?

EDIT: oh and what limits would the portal gun have? basic Aura crystal limits of heavy continuous fire would trigger a limiter or kill a crystal cartridge?

@ Mima

in short, yep. pretty much.
I wanted to explore the concept of "The Immortals' Curse" a bit, so that's why I went with that. But that won't be prominent until Part II.
Last edited by Cucoo5; 09/29/2013, 05:43 AM.
Cucoo5

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09/29/2013, 05:48 AM #45
And derp
Ok peeps, gonna catch some quick shut eye... I'll be back sooner than later.
@ Kristia

My recommendation for your character would be either Egale system or even Sol Inceneron System. I would lean toward Egale... but you can pick wherever. Just me making suggestions on where she would fit.

Kristia

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09/29/2013, 05:54 AM #46
Egale it is then

The portal gun works only as transportation by creating the gates, yet since its still a prototype, the white haired is still testing the gun.

It would be through the story that she is thinkering with it

Have you ever crossed the line between sanity and madness? You would be amazed by what lies beyond the fog..

Spoiler
Pandre

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09/29/2013, 07:04 AM #47
quick question, but what is the main objective again ???
bookdragon2000

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09/29/2013, 07:26 AM #48
Name: Nhiome Monpress

Gender: male

Race: Human

Profession and/or Talents: Expert pilot and engineer, solitary rogue

Inventory:
-digital toolbelt , used to carry a variety of stuff and as the name suggests, yes mainly tools. Basically a glorified belt with a digital bag attatched as well as some pockets for other things.
-a survival pulse pistols which he edited the limiter so that it was single-shot but each shot was much more powerful than normal.
-a handheld welder that he made some edits to do that it shoots a laser that can be used for a variety of reasons, welding, combat (non-lethal, but strong enough to knock other back and also knock them out) etc.
- The KuroiKame , A maverick fighter that he built himself

EDIT: here is a similar pic: http://preview.turbosquid.com/Previe...41f8Larger.jpg . Similar general shape (minus the "wing"s and the "can"s sticking out the front of the back area) , only thing different is the gun in front and behind and the colour should be black.

Sort of like an arrow, except the shaft is a lot shorter and nearly as thick as the arrowhead. The "arrowhead" is where the engine, controls, basic equipment and things like that are located, this is basically the cockpit. The forward cannon is located here as well. The arrow shaft is like along corridor but it includes a comfortable sleeping area as well as entertainment like some books and minor games, made for long journeys/waits. The "fletches" or the back of the ship is the cargo area, where the loot can be stored as well as containing more complicated pieces of machinery and food&water and other such supplies. The cargo area also leads to the modified airlock, which can not only be used for docking at stations, it can also attach to and drill through other ships. The airlock is quite small and due to most of the technology there being devoted to the movement and special gadgets of the airlock, the doors within the airlock itself is extremely simple, just two normal steel doors in succession but with vacuum seals, they would not be much use if the ship needed to be evacuated quickly, but then if such a need arises, it would probably be too late. So the airlock is relatively primitive, excluding its special capabilities. When viewed from the side, the approximate ratio of the front to the middle to the back is 2:3:5. Maybe about 2.5 meters tall, 5 meters wide and 30 meters long for the entire ship, pretty small. No wings or anything like that, thrusters located at the back, the guns are located either directly in front or behind to allow for the 180 degree range.

Personality: Cunning, trusts no one, does not give up easily, but knows to stop when up against impossible odds.

Elemental preference: Fire

History: He lived in sol incineron, he was brought up in a harsh environment. His mother died early in his childhood due to a gang attacking and attempted to steal a rich deposit of various minerals that his family had found. His Father managed to set up a business mining and then selling the ores. Meanwhile, Nhiome sometimes collected some himself and by the age of 18 had a large horde hidden away, he also spent the time learning about ships and their contruction as well as other weapons and general engineering, he could do this due to the small wealth his father collected from the business. Many others attacked but were driven off. When he was 18 ,another gang attacked and this time succeeded, killing his father and Nhiome was forced to flee. He used his stash and using the heat of the surface as his furnace, slowly built his own ship, fashioned after the maverick fighters he had studied, but he made some adjustments of his own.
He built it with maneuverability and speed in mind. He succeeded and became something like a pirate. He attacked, disabled and stole from transport ships. At first he had only a crude cannon, his special welder and one crystal for both the engine and the cannon. But as his wealth grew from his thievery, he collected some small crystals to power his cannons and attained a large one for his engine. He upgraded his own cannon and added a second, each able to traverse 180 degrees, one forward, one at the back. The guns are not as good as those other ships have and have a shorter range and less firepower, but that suits him, he wants to raid the ships, not destroy them. He has a smaller gun in the middle of his ship able to shoot in any direction that he built himself for a specific purpose to launch his special bullets at close ran. The speed and agility of his ship is far superior than any other fighters, but the shields are only strong enough to defend against glancing shots and near misses, direct hits could critically damage his ship, luckily he is an excellent pilot and planner and has avoided being shot in the past. The only slight problems that have aroused were wear and tear either due to the high speeds he usually maintains and the heat of the sun in his home solar system. He is able to fix them easily.
He has developed a way of raiding that causes next to no deaths and is quick and efficient (I will demonstrate this in the first post in the IC). He habitually visits black markets in the outer planets of his home solar system. Many there would recognise him and does business with him, but none actually knows his real identity or anything about him, only that he often brings back good stuff. He is only known as the pilot of KuroiKame. Many there are tight-lipped about him, partly due to the good business he gives them and partly due to the rumors that he wiped out an entire gang that attacked him in some manner.
Has started building similar ships of the "KuroiKame" class and scattered them as backups hidden all over the solar systems he visits.

Bio: In the past he has remained subtle, but recently, his crimes had started becoming high-profile and reckless, he sometimes even attacks military ships. think about it in terms of a "yolo" attitude.

Appearence: A comfortable, black long-sleeve shirt, long white gloves, loose black jeans, white combat boots. Has a black helmet and suit with a visor and also voice-distortion and other systems for some purposes. Black hair that reaches slightly past the collar of the back of his shirt, black eyes.

Notes:
Ship called KuroiKaze. He built many more other ships hidden away of what he called the "KuroiKaze" class. Ships of this class puts emphasis on maneuverability and speed. But certain ones have better shields or others have more powerful guns. They are all meant for a single pilot and has a small cargo bay for loot. The one he uses right now is the his very first one and the fastest and most modern of his fleet. If he desires, he could command his entire fleet from his own ship, but his intentions are for them to be backups and just to raid, not to start a war. But it is still better to be prepared. The fleet is scattered around the solar systems, in secret locations where he sometimes hides out for a while. He has more ships in solar systems he visits more often like Sol Incineron where he has 2 other ships and a third under construction. On other solar systems he keeps 1 ship at each hideout for backups and also some spare parts just in case. In certain solar systems, where the military force is a lot more powerful, he does not even have a base there, like in Nexion. In total he has a fleet numbering approximately 4-6 ships not counting those under construction. The abundancy is due to his passion for ship building and his huge amount of free time, he used to only raid occasionally just to get resources and to support himself. ("Used to" meaning before he became reckless.)

EDIT 2: list of ships, their capabilities and their locations.

KuroiKaze class ships: much faster than normal fighters but with less firepower and shielding. Guns on these ships often have a greater range due to being able to turn to face different directions instead of being fixed to point in one direction.

KuroiKaze: Originally average ship in the KuroiKaze class. Has 1 projectile gun and 2 pulse cannons. First ship built by Nhiome. After Crash in Sol Inceneron and 2 major overhauls, now has 2 engines+ a backup as well as stronger shielding at the forward part of the hull to reduce damage from the high speeds it travels at. Reduced storage capacity. Currently in Sol Inceneron Base.

NatsuKaze: Average ship in the KuroiKaze class. Has 1 projectile gun and 2 pulse cannons. Currently in Sol Inceneron Base.

FuyuKaze: Faster even than the KuroiKaze class ships. Has 2 projectile guns, earlier model. Currently in Helios Base.

ShiroiKaze: Faster even than the KuroiKaze class ships. Has 1 projectile gun and 1 pulse cannon, later model. Currently in Sol Inceneron Base.

AkiKaze: KuroiKaze class ship with better gunnery capabilities, guns have longer range and greater explosive force. Has 3 pulse cannons. Currently in Helios base.

FumeiKaze: KuroiKaze class stealth ship, has the best shielding among Nhiome's fighters, shield potency of approximtely 0.3. Undetectable by technology, hard to spot using visual. Has 1 projectile gun and 1 pulse cannon. Currently in Celestora base.

KamiKaze: Nhiome's battle cruiser, somewhere about the size of a Zeta cruiser, shield potency of about 4. Has 8 pulse cannons, 2 projectile guns, 4 cruiser rapids, 4 heavy rapids, a gun equivalent to a cruiser charged, but with a greater firing rate, this gun requires Nhiome to power it with the Aura crystal fused with his hand. Able to carry up to 8 fighters. Currently under construction in Sol Inceneron.

Yakaze: KuroiKaze class ship but with better shielding. Has 1 projectile gun and 2 pulse cannons. Destroyed in battle against alpha fleet omega-class carriers.
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He seems sort of OP, but he will probably die midway through the story (clue: the same reason he became reckless) , the ships are just his legacy.
Last edited by bookdragon2000; 12/17/2013, 02:44 AM.
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Cucoo5

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09/29/2013, 07:55 AM #49
Ok back because my cough is keeping me up...

anyway...

@book

hahaha, he's fine. Actually I have a mercenary group led by Starla's older sister, Ember Monroe, that would take interest in him quite well. Plus, he sounds like a sort of Dark Aion or I should say.... If Aion were to Fox McCloud, Nhiome would be to Wolf O'Donnel. That's the feeling I get.

His fighter would also be like the Wolfen in a sense and be the rival fighter class to Aion's Blade Series Fighter, Blade X-02 "Eclipse Blade", which was established with his "Father" Orion with Blade X-00 aka "Sonic Blade Zero" Which is legendary for its pure speed and known to be able to cut through offensive and defensive lines of ships like a knife. The back story is that ever since "Sonic Blade Zero" people tried to replicate the Blade series, but failed. Aion, Revere, and Navarre are the only three people with fighters that are officially of the Blade Series. What makes the Blade Series Unique and near impossible to replicate (sort of the secret ingredient you could say...) is the Nova Engine (which is not used for propulsion, rather the shields and allow it to become a physical projectile in of itself, thus the name of the fighter series.) The KuroiKame could be the rival series to the Blade series.

The only thing I would adjust slightly may be the concept of having fighters everywhere, but it's not that big of a deal if ya leave it as is.

Anyway, I'll introduce the "Dark Roses" perhaps and have them try to recruit him, or even the Guardians may show up and be forever the classic "Join us or die" kind of people... though things will present themselves and you can choose accordingly.

Plus it's not OP for what he has. I have plenty of counter balances to even it out.

So it's good.

@ Pandre

In short summary for the ultimate goal: Save the galaxy from annihilation.

Slightly longer and more specific for Part I: Put an end to the War of Eternity that has been raging for a millennia. The Strike Fighters, the "knights" per se of the Venturian Council, are attempting to quell the uprising of the NGO, who seek to end the War by overthrowing the Venturian Council. On the side there are the Guardians who seem to be on neither side and have their own mysterious goals.

For Part II: Save the Galaxy from killer parasites and self proclaimed goddesses of destruction and discover the truth of the Halls of Time and the Guardians of Time (not to be confused with the Guardians in Part I).

@Kristia

Alright. You could start her off maybe near where Eleos aka Gunner is. That would actually explain how he would know what a Bioroid is later on when I introduce the parasites called the Nihiliods., because Aion's group discovers the Nihiliods when the try to save a Princess in Egale who is a Bioroid, which when they examine her corpse, Gunner recognizes the fact she's a Bioroid and actually saves her consciousness.
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Pandre

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09/29/2013, 07:59 AM #50
part 2 sounds like starcraft 2...
but anyway, can we be 'Guardians'?