@Wonder
Looks good. There area few things I have to point out however.
1. Power of the moon. It's not really that big of a problem tough. He you state the light from the moon as something of it's own. In this world however it is just like any other type of light, photons traveling trough the air. This could be fixed with the fact that maybe he didn't really know the properties of the sunlight he controlled. Maybe it got to concentrated and hot and in the end he killed his master with it. The reason moon light is easier to control is because it's not as much of it, leading to lower amount of heat and energy.
2. Goodness of the moon. This is the big one.
Noe that when I talk about gods here, I talk about the six gods. The seventh is something entirely different. This is a problem because there is a set amount of gods that exist. There is also ways that gods work and rules that governs gods. One of these rules are that they might not ineract with the world in any way. They are seperated from the world by a barrier of sort. This is a problem because he both say and talked to her. The next thing is that they all have a magical element associated with them. This element is way above the normal elements and is normally outside of what normal humans can do. Only the gods selected people can use in, barely. There is also the fact that I really don't want more gods. It would also be kind of hard to integrate it into the plot.
3. His magic knowledge. This one I just need a explanation sort of on.
While he is a magic student, that was several years ago. Magic and the knowledge about magic is currently at it's prime age. New things are leanrt fairly often and the half-life of knowledge is about 5 years. Maybe something more appropriate would be 4-2.
There is also the fact that he have 5 in Geography. This is at the point where is fairly knowledgeable about how the world looks. I just need a explanation on how he gained such knowledge.
Looks good. There area few things I have to point out however.
1. Power of the moon. It's not really that big of a problem tough. He you state the light from the moon as something of it's own. In this world however it is just like any other type of light, photons traveling trough the air. This could be fixed with the fact that maybe he didn't really know the properties of the sunlight he controlled. Maybe it got to concentrated and hot and in the end he killed his master with it. The reason moon light is easier to control is because it's not as much of it, leading to lower amount of heat and energy.
2. Goodness of the moon. This is the big one.
Noe that when I talk about gods here, I talk about the six gods. The seventh is something entirely different. This is a problem because there is a set amount of gods that exist. There is also ways that gods work and rules that governs gods. One of these rules are that they might not ineract with the world in any way. They are seperated from the world by a barrier of sort. This is a problem because he both say and talked to her. The next thing is that they all have a magical element associated with them. This element is way above the normal elements and is normally outside of what normal humans can do. Only the gods selected people can use in, barely. There is also the fact that I really don't want more gods. It would also be kind of hard to integrate it into the plot.
3. His magic knowledge. This one I just need a explanation sort of on.
While he is a magic student, that was several years ago. Magic and the knowledge about magic is currently at it's prime age. New things are leanrt fairly often and the half-life of knowledge is about 5 years. Maybe something more appropriate would be 4-2.
There is also the fact that he have 5 in Geography. This is at the point where is fairly knowledgeable about how the world looks. I just need a explanation on how he gained such knowledge.
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